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thisisfate
Nov 15, 2005, 12:15
今日の朝は雨でした。ぼくは8じごろおきました、ちょ っどさむかったです。あさごはんがありませんでした。 それから一人でブスに乗って学校へいきました。第1ク ラスはくわいあがあって、歌いて、たんのしかったです 。第2、3クラスは英語と算数でした。第4クラスは日 本語でした。日本の先生はほんとにとてもぷさいくと古 いでした。じゃん念づしたね、でも僕は泣きおえをしま せんでした。全然つまらなかったです。3時15分学校 はおわりました。そして、家へ帰って、昼寝て、8時ご ろおきました。沢山宿題をして、べんきょうして、プソ コンでStarcraftをしました。9時10分シャワーをして、11時30分にねをしました。外はちょっどあ めでした。よかった夢を見ました。


季節、
  ぼくはいちばんすきな季節は冬です。さむいがすき ,僕のたんじょうびですから。スキーをし、雪だるまをつくりたいです。Snowing? がだい キき、ゆきはきれいですから。すき焼きをたべたいです ヒ。
  一番好きな季節は夏です。沢山スポツをしてができ ると長い夏休みがありますから。

Can u give me some example for xxxし、xxxxして、xxxxxxをしました。
like 晩御飯前に遊びし、手を洗い清めるして、いたたきます と言いまし。something like that ...
ありがとうごぜいます 
:sorry:

MeAndroo
Nov 16, 2005, 05:44
I'd hate to make your essay above your level, so I'll just point out some basic errors.

-Fun (past tense) is tanoshikatta, instead of taNnoshikatta
-Computer is pAsokon, instead of pusokon
-Bus is bAsu, instead of busu
-In line 1, you want chotto instead of choddo
-When describing your Japanese teacher, you might not want to use totemo alongside hontou (which has an additional u by the way). Choose one and go with it.
-When you say you saw a nice dream, in the structure you use only one part needs to be in past tense, either the adjective (ii-yokatta) or the verb (mimashita). You could say "ii yume wo mimashita" or "mita yume ha yokatta desu."
-Sports has a long sound between the po and the tsu (supootsu)

thisisfate
Nov 16, 2005, 09:08
Hey Thanks for the help :-) I may write more later.
And Can u give me some example for xxxし、xxxxして、xxxxxxをしました。
Cuz i am not sure how to use that combine sentense thing.

MeAndroo
Nov 16, 2005, 09:34
Sorry for the romaji...and if there's some grammar mistakes...I'm one of those people who likes dropping particles in speech.

xxxshi:
"Eiga wo mi ni ikitakunai. Sono eigakan ha tooi SHI, sono eiga ni amari kyoumi ga nai."
(I don't want to go see the movie. That theater is far AND I don't really have an interest in that movie)

xxxshite:
The -te form is versatile, and that makes it tough, because it can be used to link a lot of things. Adjectives and verbs can be conjugated using it to mean a variety of things. For this example, I'm going to assume you mean shite as the verb suru, and to use two verbs in the same sentence.
"Asobu mae ni, sentaku shite shawaa wo abite kudasai"
(Before you go play, clean up and take a shower)

xxx wo shimashita
I'm not sure if you're referring to the -tari...-tari...suru form here. If you are:
"natsuyasumi ni umi ni ITTARI ryoukou wo SHITARI shimashita."
(During spring break, I went to the ocean and did some traveling)

I hope that helps, cuz there's a number of ways to interpret what kind of examples you want.

thisisfate
Nov 16, 2005, 13:11
The xxxxshi one << U only can put adjective like Big small happy ....? or Can u put verb? Cuz i always use shite, shite, te.... and i m new to xxxxshi.

MeAndroo
Nov 17, 2005, 06:56
You can use verbs too.
"Benkyou ga dekinai shi, kawaii ko ga inai shi..."
(I can't study and there's no cute girls...)

thisisfate
Nov 17, 2005, 17:53
how about ラーメンをたべし、おいしかったです  << right ? cuz i guess i may know how to use xxxxshi, want to make sure it :p
I guess i am wrong lol can u give me more examples :) like different kinds of examples >_<;; thx again...

Elizabeth
Nov 17, 2005, 21:34
how about ラーメンをたべし、おいしかったです  << right ? cuz i guess i may know how to use xxxxshi, want to make sure it :p
I guess i am wrong lol can u give me more examples :) like different kinds of examples >_<;; thx again...
First of all the form you want here is "食べるし。”
Secondly, し is mainly used when you want to say "because" or "and" in the sense of "for this reason."

I don't have time for more examples now :sorry: but please check the below corrections. Ika wa teisei desu. :;

ラーメンを食べておいしかった
ラーメンおいしく食べました
おいしいラーメンを食べました