New attempt at a simple conversation

[espen180]

Discussion between close friends about an upcoming quiz at school.

- あなた は ひゃく ぶ う か?
Do you think you'll get a full score?
- その は いつも おこるない。
That would never happen!
- だが, なして。
Nevertheless, you have to try.
- よし。 いってきます。
Yeah, yeah. See you later.
のち。。。
Later... (evening)
- こんばんは。
Hi.
- こんばんは。
Hi.
- じゃ, どう でした か?
So how did it go?
- みち. ボく は あす に みいだす。
I won't know until tomorrow.
- へえ?
Okay?
- は。 ぼく は ち に はしるべし。
Yeah. I have to hurry home.
- だいじょうぶ, またね。
Alright, bye.
- いってきます。
See you later.

I'm still learning the basic grammar (sentence construction and so on).

So how did I do? :worried:

[undrentide]

Do you use any text books or online lessons to learn the basics?
I'm afraid that your attempt is a fine mixture of normal conversation and wrong verb conjugation, or words that are not used in normal situation...
:relief:

While it is good to try to make some simple sentences to learn a language, I would like to suggest you to learn some very very basic sentence (something like "this is xxx" or "I do xxx") and make similar sentences with different nouns and verbs. After you got some basics, you should proceed and try to make a little more complicated sentences.

Ganbatte kudasai ne.

[espen180]

I use some websites, but I am having some difficulty with the verb conjugations and sentence structure.

Could you please point out some of my mistakes and correct them?

[Elizabeth]

I use some websites, but I am having some difficulty with the verb conjugations and sentence structure.

Could you please point out some of my mistakes and correct them?
I agree with undrentide-san. :relief:

Start with as simple and polite (no manga style :relief:) a structure as you can imagine and when that feels really comfortable, fine tune it or make the sitaution more explicit with your now advanced grammar and vocab. :note:

But try it out with something like this first :


あしたはテス(しけん)トがありますね。

そうですね。

もうべんきょうしましたか？


いいえ、まままだです。


(later)

テストはどうでしたか？

そのテストはむずかしかった。

。。。。

[undrentide]

- あなた は ひゃく ぶ う か?
Do you think you'll get a full score?

Full score: 満点（まんてん）
Do you think ~? : （あなたは）〜と思（おも）いますか？
you'll get a full score : 満点（まんてん）をとる

あなたは満点をとると思いますか？
（あなたは　まんてんを　とる　と　おもいますか？）

This is too complicated structure for a beginner.
You should stick to a simple, basic sentence at this stage, such as "will you get a full score?"

- その は いつも おこるない。
That would never happen!

その cannot be used on its own - it must be placed before noun, to express "that xxx".
"That" alone should be それ
いつも : always
never : ぜったい／けっして〜ない
起（おこ）る＋ない＝おこらない (you should learn verb conjugation first.)

それはけっしておこらない。

- だが, なして。
Nevertheless, you have to try.


Nevertheless : それでも
have to 〜: 〜なくてはならない、ねばならない
try : やってみる、ためす
それでも、やってみなくてはならない
それでも、やらなくてはならない

なして: I assume you picked up the word なす (to do) and try the conjugation of te-form (なして). But なす in the sense of "to do" is rarely used in daily conversation, it is usually used in a very formal writing.
Another word なして is a dialect meaning "why".

- よし。 いってきます。
Yeah, yeah. See you later.

よし is often used as "OK" "all right".
いってきます is a greeting to say when you're leaving home for somewhere, when you're expected to be back later.
There's no equivalent phrase in English, people often translate it as "good by".

See you later is またね, あとでね.

のち。。。
Later... (evening)


のち is another very formal sounding meaning "after" or "later".
You do not use it on its own, except in weather forecast;
晴（は）れのち曇（くも）り
fine, later cloudy

Later... (evening)
If this is a kind of stage direction (or in the drama, etc.), in Japanese
しばらくして (after a while)
夜になって (now in the evening)
sort of phrase is used but I cannot think of equivalent to "later" in this context. (Maybe it's only me, though.)

- こんばんは。
Hi.
- こんばんは。
Hi.


こんばんは is good evening.
It is OK to translate it as "hi" but to make it sound lighter as the same level as "hi" I would use やあ (if it is between friends and the speakers are male.)

- じゃ, どう でした か?
So how did it go?

じゃ: same as じゃあ, which is contracted form of では.
In this context it does not really fit - maybe you can say それじゃ（あ）.

どうでしたか is OK for "how did it go" though it sounds a bit too formal in your sentences.

- みち. ボく は あす に みいだす。
I won't know until tomorrow.


みち? I assume you mean 未知（みち）, which means "unkonwn" but it sounds far too formal as if formal writing.
Anyway, you cannot use it for "I don7t know".
I won't know ：わかりません or しりません　(Here わかりません is better)
until tomorrow あすまで

みいだす（見出す） means "to find out".
Again it sounds too formal and rigid in this context.

- へえ?
Okay?


へえ？ can be translated into various forms, like "oh, really?" "aha?" but anyway in this context if you use へえ？ it sounds as if you do not really agree or you are doubtful or scornful towards the one you're talking to.

Sorry I cannot understand the meaning/connotation of "Okay?" here either.

- は。 ぼく は ち に はしるべし。
Yeah. I have to hurry home.


は sounds like "huh!".
If it meant to be yeah, then it is うん.
うん is an informal form of　はい(=yes).

- だいじょうぶ, またね。
Alright, bye.


またね is more like "later"

- いってきます。
See you later.


いってきます is wrong unless you're leaving home.


Recommendation:
Tae Kim's Japanese guide to Japanese grammar
http://www.guidetojapanese.org/

[espen180]

Thank for the corrections and the link. I'll check it out.

About the English translations, I didn't write literal translations, but rathar what I though the conversation would be if it was conducted in English. Maybe that was stupid of me.